A poem : The Minstrel Boy (another Corrs inspired one)

Anya Bolton

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Gay ~ [in this poem it means] happy, joyful, merry

THE MINSTREL BOY

When the ladies in their gowns so elegant and so gay
Ask the men in their suits ever dashing to lead the way
To a room of sparkling wine glasses and music flowing round
Then only can he be appreciated for offering his gift
Of the grace in the sound.

Without it it seems their noble clothes are mere rags all torn
Until he weaves upon his instruments for them
A story of kings in love with queens
Then only the finest cloth shall be worn.

So when he is done dressing them in his gift
He leaves them for a home of those more humble than of bearing wealth.

So my beloved, whenever you feel such gifts
Which please you and bring you joy
Remember to give back in return
For the person could be sacrificing for you his own fortune.

It is not the women who put on immediately gowns so elegant-
Nor the men who put on the suits ever dashing to lead the way.

It is only when with just a story and upon his instruments for them he’d play.

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They say that we should be grateful for the things in everyday life and we should have gratitude for those who make these things happen


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"kim ownz"
-Krizalid

"I ain't happy, I'm feeling sad
I've got sunshine in a bag
I'm useless-but not for long;
My future is coming on."
~Gorillaz
 

Anya Bolton

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No one's replied...until now and that's me :/


Crap, I don't know why I bother. Hmm......Orochi Tigressa or EvilMattMun, can one of you guys close this thread?

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"kim ownz"
-Krizalid

"I ain't happy, I'm feeling sad
I've got sunshine in a bag
I'm useless-but not for long;
My future is coming on."
~Gorillaz
 

Enki

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aw, I always take time to re read things before feedbacking ^^;;

The imagery is really nice. Like a turn of the century (ahem..last century, must get used to that o_o;
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kind of feel. The first verse was really nice imagery. May I ask which song it was inspired from?

And ah..I know what you feel like about not getting feedback, sorry ^^
 

Kyo-wa

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Sorry Anya-sama
... it's very nice poem...
Kyo-wa might have read soon ne? demo =_+:::
.... scary thing keep happen.
 

Anya Bolton

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Nani? People actually like it? Oh my God, thank you guys so much
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=) ^_^

I don't care how much feedback I get, even if only one person gives feedback. Thank you Enki and Kyo-Wa-Chan loads!

Enki : the poems I write inspired by the Corrs are inspired by songs with the same name as the poem I write. Instrumental, I add. Here's my first poem I posted in the BB,I hope you guys read and I hope you like it. If you don't like it then that's okay, we don't have to like the same thing.

Here we go...

ERIN SHORE

By the light of the moon she began her Search,
A quest for a land of green, faeries and sea.
When the Roman legionaries came to her Village, she asked the Druid where to Escape, to be;
The Druid he told her of a shore of green, Faeries and sea.
A place where Romans dare not tread
Upon for fear of destroying such a haven of
Which many have not read.
The child was now older than what
She was ago after several years,
Now a woman who wishes to lie
In this shore, to dream and put aside her fears.
Hair that was a warm brown had fade
To a trembling grey as were her eyes
Once a glorious jade.
But what of the Romans, whom she
Had originally meant to flee?
End thine quest, they had chosen
To leave for their empire, oh-
Stop the quest for a shore
Of green, faeries and sea!
At last after decades for her haven,
She gave a breath of sigh
And silently wept as she had found
Upon the rocks for her to be:
A shore of grass green, watchful faeries and salt sea.

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You know, I just use a rhyme scheme of what feels right

So 'The Minstrel Boy' and 'Erin Shore' were inspired by instrumental songs by the Corrs called 'The Minstrel Boy' and 'Erin Shore' ^_^;;



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"kim ownz"
-Krizalid

"I ain't happy, I'm feeling sad
I've got sunshine in a bag
I'm useless-but not for long;
My future is coming on."
~Gorillaz
 

Enki

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oooh, I gotta listen to those now
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Hmmm, just a quickie post, cause school is beckoning o_O

Celtic flavor! ^^ That's some really colorful imnagery the poem gives (green, brown, grey, jade, blue ect) and the rhyming doesn't look forced at all. Good stuff
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Sorry I didn't get to this one sooner, either!

It flows well (both of them), and it just has that... touch. Y'know? Keep posting more of your poems, they're pretty neat.
 

Anya Bolton

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Thanx EvilMattMUN! Sorry I couldn't finish 'Mr Barders goes to Orochinagi/Fighters.net', exams got in the way >< And anyway it's too late now, I deleted the rest of the story that I was going to post up. Thanx for the kind words.

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"kim ownz"
-Krizalid

"I ain't happy, I'm feeling sad
I've got sunshine in a bag
I'm useless-but not for long;
My future is coming on."
~Gorillaz
 
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