Something kind of different from my other poems... ...

Anya Bolton

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Running. Running away

A live body inhaled deep.

He was running away

Then stopped when he realised that over the log he should have leaped.


The man with the weapon

Vowed that the body shall be in eternal sleep.


Scurrying..hurrying..

Vowed that he shall escape eternal sleep.


A click of the weapon

Man swallowing hard then released-

One click of the weapon

Over the log its messanger leaped.


One strong being-

Swifter than others; prehaps then all-

All it took was one tiny object for him to fall.


Lying down...positioned in odd angles...

Then the man arrives.

No shed tear. No shock of horror.

Instead he smiles and readies his weapon.

What is good in being awake?

What is wrong in eternal sleep?

A click of that weapon and another messanger would be nested.

The dark hole of the weapon gave time for the body’s still eyes to be rested.


But Man stops to gaze at the body

He stares in wonder...in admiration...in envy.

The short lush hair, serene eyes and noble head

Hate in his heart believes it’ll be only more admirable when dead.


The wounded bleeding body

Sees nothing save everything into the darkness fade

The majestic bleeding body

Inhales slower, trembling upon the white snow laid.


Man thinks in silence: is it awake or eternally asleep?

The body is tired and in neeed of eternal sleep.


Dark bathes all in its rough cotten sheet

Such a painful price for the eternal sleep.


As Man thinks he lights a cigarette

Its embers glow

The body is comforted by it even though

The second messanger’s task is now complete.

Beauty in death? Beauty in life?

No one shed a single tear for the dead moose and his past strife.'
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What do I have to say: I was inspired by Silvia Plath's poem 'Medallion' and this extract from Metallica "..When it comes to be just a soothing light at the end of your tunnel..just a freight train coming your way.."
 

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Anya,

That is some true poetry...keep writing. You have no idea how much talent you have...

Bryan

PS: I meen it.
 

Lou Gojira

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That was pretty cool. I normally don't read stuff like that, with the exception of some of Henry Rollins' books, but it was enjoyable. Do you happen to read this stuff or perform it live by any chance? I've heard of people doing that in coffee houses and such, 'course I've never been to a coffee house, so I wouldn't know. But keep it up, I wouldn't mind seeing more sometime.
 

Anya Bolton

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I'm 14 years old. I can't perform live at coffee houses, sorry. Have any of you read my other poems? They're quite different from this one but their reviews are fine.

I don't want to be a poet when I'm older btw. I like doing creative stuff like writing storiues and poems and drawing.


I can't sing or dance because I'm tone deaf and I suck at dancing which I don't like.


Thank you for taking the time to review this poem guys ^_^
 

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You already know what I think of em. An enjoyable poem and sends the message well. (Then it's comes down to what the reader perceives)
*waits for Soul of the Wild*
 
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